You are
flat, you are flat,
Fixed between two slides like
A germ, firm. Flat. I lionize.
Brother of the cry of the back door,
Brother of the bat.
Fixed between two slides like
A germ, firm. Flat. I lionize.
Brother of the cry of the back door,
Brother of the bat.
Trimmed
of matter, trimmed
Of fat.
Witnessed only in nudged knick
Knacks,
or in a touch, a paralytic pressing
Of this,
of that. You seem disappointed, though.
You seem
a bit detached.
Black
concentrate. The same as
In your grandmother’s frames –
You are monochrome, revolving in an
In-between state, yet to navigate to grip
In your grandmother’s frames –
You are monochrome, revolving in an
In-between state, yet to navigate to grip
The knob.
There is no knob. Not yet.
A cross-stitch
wheel with your thread
A bridal train. It scrapes like a butcher’s babe
A bridal train. It scrapes like a butcher’s babe
And here
it is, the rift. Mobile in daylight, twilight,
All
light, you walk. O look at those limbs,
Slim,
black legumes in a crystal suit.
Ironclad,
it accommodates.
You
asked. Implored. Now mother moons lend
A poor,
poor excuse for a voice. A sharpened sigh
At night,
an audible frieze. Flat, pressed
Poppy, the glass is not your crutch.
It boxed you up all Christmas-like, all
Poppy, the glass is not your crutch.
It boxed you up all Christmas-like, all
Chinese.
So lustrous,
so compact, scalp smoothed
By the
stuff of trees.
Dry, indelible,
flat. Pellucid, with an upright riddled
Facsimile
rightfully cast. The onus of a
Caryatid,
holding up this crust.
It made
you useful, little loaf beneath the
Garden.
Glassy aftermath – you hang horizons
On your
shoulders like stoles, like holes unbidden
In the
matte. It heard you ask and ask and
Ask. That
swindler. That savior. That ashen acrobat.
© 2014 BENJAMIN SMITH
This poem has the feel of TS Elliot - but I struggled to find meaning - to place the poppy either as a woman, or life. It was interesting enough that I'd like to hear more if you cared to share - Sometimes the reader fails the poem - bw
ReplyDeleteThis is actually my response to the prompt about writing as/from the point of view of "the dead man." Imagine myself, the speaker, critiquing and commenting on my dead, intermediary self, as if it were a bloated out of body experience.
DeleteI like both the intensity and ambition in this piece - there is significant potential here and I will be back... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeleteSome of the images and statements take me back to the Beat Poets and their free movement around words and associations. I particularly like this line: you hang horizons On your shoulders like stoles...that could be a whole nother poem right there. excellent line. Hayes Spencer is Kanzensakura
ReplyDeletei guess one of the nicest thing about technology today..
ReplyDeleteis fresh flowers dresses last forever.. relatively speaking
on Internet love.. where the flowers live so much longer
than love even speaks a human voice in origination at
least..:)
Your diction is sharp and interesting. I especially enjoyed the discomforting 'paralytic pressing', 'upright riddled/Facsimile rightfully cast', 'Glassy aftermath', and 'ashen acrobat'. Super-flat poppy eye distortion.
ReplyDeleteThere are words and combinations that take me on a rollerdoaster of words.
ReplyDeleteDense and well crafted.
ReplyDeleteRich with description...yes, as Bjorn said - 'a rollercoaster of words.'
ReplyDeleteThe imagery here is luscious, rich.....and then this line just nails the ending:
ReplyDelete"It made you useful, little loaf beneath the
Garden."
This, for me, adds so many layers of double meanings, of underlying hidden insinuations and messages and truths and WOW, just so deeply poignant. Excellent write.
Thank you so much, C.C.! I'm glad you see excellence in poignancy. xo
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