My head in the waste bin, guts plucked and
Rawness within removed - Too true, I am no
Rawness within removed - Too true, I am no
Particular delicacy. But, see, I've already begun
To section my flesh for a lifetime by finger.
When I grow nervous or panicked I
Catch my claw at my neck, gently
Scratching, as if to peel open a
Flap capping a backup gash for a
Lung's fill of oxygen
Like a goddamned fish. My
Eyes swivel to the sides, my skin
A rubber suit of armor, slick and wet,
Soil for fins. A mouth fixed to a
Shrunken zero. And you stand
High as a fever, swaying like the
Concrete heat that sits on the
Hood of my car, a jittering veil
Between us.
You flick your cigarette. It turns to flies.
I carefully bob at them, their
Promises, warnings - Look at your face.
Below that glass nose rest two thin worms,
One atop the other. They part in invitation -
The graceful, grubby curtains of a dark hidden
Hook, meant to pass unnoticed - I've noticed
A thousand times. You lower your face into a
Dream, spitting that slow steeled gray J into the
Dream, spitting that slow steeled gray J into the
Crests of a sea - I fall for all three. Hook, line,
Sinker, and you're feasting on me.
© 2015 BENJAMIN SMITH
Sinker, and you're feasting on me.
© 2015 BENJAMIN SMITH
There are so many strong metaphors in this poem, that manage to make me freeze to ice and burn to ash at the same time.. Some relationships where not meant to be.
ReplyDeleteThis is so intense!!
ReplyDeleteRaw emotion expressed here, Benjamin. With your ability to describe you drag me right into the pain. Very strong write. Blogger won't allow me to comment using wordpress so I use my defunct blogger address. Victoria
ReplyDeleteGood heavens, brother. This is incredible!
ReplyDeleteThe opening line is killer: "A stomach of dust can have me for dinner."
Also these ...
"I am no
Particular delicacy."
"A mouth fixed to a
Shrunken zero."
"And you stand
High as a fever, swaying like the
Concrete heat"
"a jittering veil
Between us."
"curtains of a dark hidden
Hook, meant to pass unnoticed - I've noticed
A thousand times. You lower your face into a
Dream, spitting that slow steeled gray J into the
Crests of a sea - I fall for all three. Hook, line,
Sinker, and you're feasting on me."
Very strong write. The pain of this plainly says to let go of some relationships...move on for your own good.
ReplyDeletepowerful imagery & the last three lines are stellar...
ReplyDeleteMy comment didn't stick. Trying again. So much here to like. I liked the fishy beginning and loved this line: "You flick your cigarette. It turns to flies."
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This is raw and vivid and so full of stunning metaphors. Very powerful write.
ReplyDeleteinventive turn on an old line ~
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