Monday, December 29, 2014

Pressed Poppy

You are flat, you are flat,
Fixed between two slides like
A germ, firm. Flat. I lionize.
Brother of the cry of the back door,
Brother of the bat.

Trimmed of matter, trimmed
Of fat. Witnessed only in nudged knick
Knacks, or in a touch, a paralytic pressing
Of this, of that. You seem disappointed, though.
You seem a bit detached.

Black concentrate. The same as
In your grandmother’s frames
 
You are monochrome, revolving in an
In-between state, yet to navigate to grip
The knob. There is no knob. Not yet.

A cross-stitch wheel with your thread
A bridal train. It scrapes like a butcher’s babe
And here it is, the rift. Mobile in daylight, twilight,
All light, you walk. O look at those limbs,
Slim, black legumes in a crystal suit.
Ironclad, it accommodates.

You asked. Implored. Now mother moons lend
A poor, poor excuse for a voice. A sharpened sigh
At night, an audible frieze. Flat, pressed
Poppy, the glass is not your crutch. 
It boxed you up all Christmas-like, all
Chinese.

So lustrous, so compact, scalp smoothed
By the stuff of trees.
Dry, indelible, flat. Pellucid, with an upright riddled
Facsimile rightfully cast.  The onus of a
Caryatid, holding up this crust.

It made you useful, little loaf beneath the
Garden. Glassy aftermath you hang horizons
On your shoulders like stoles, like holes unbidden
In the matte. It heard you ask and ask and

Ask. That swindler. That savior. That ashen acrobat.


© 2014 BENJAMIN SMITH

11 comments:

  1. This poem has the feel of TS Elliot - but I struggled to find meaning - to place the poppy either as a woman, or life. It was interesting enough that I'd like to hear more if you cared to share - Sometimes the reader fails the poem - bw

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    1. This is actually my response to the prompt about writing as/from the point of view of "the dead man." Imagine myself, the speaker, critiquing and commenting on my dead, intermediary self, as if it were a bloated out of body experience.

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  2. I like both the intensity and ambition in this piece - there is significant potential here and I will be back... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  3. Some of the images and statements take me back to the Beat Poets and their free movement around words and associations. I particularly like this line: you hang horizons On your shoulders like stoles...that could be a whole nother poem right there. excellent line. Hayes Spencer is Kanzensakura

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  4. i guess one of the nicest thing about technology today..
    is fresh flowers dresses last forever.. relatively speaking
    on Internet love.. where the flowers live so much longer
    than love even speaks a human voice in origination at
    least..:)

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  5. Your diction is sharp and interesting. I especially enjoyed the discomforting 'paralytic pressing', 'upright riddled/Facsimile rightfully cast', 'Glassy aftermath', and 'ashen acrobat'. Super-flat poppy eye distortion.

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  6. There are words and combinations that take me on a rollerdoaster of words.

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  7. Rich with description...yes, as Bjorn said - 'a rollercoaster of words.'

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  8. The imagery here is luscious, rich.....and then this line just nails the ending:

    "It made you useful, little loaf beneath the
    Garden."

    This, for me, adds so many layers of double meanings, of underlying hidden insinuations and messages and truths and WOW, just so deeply poignant. Excellent write.

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    1. Thank you so much, C.C.! I'm glad you see excellence in poignancy. xo

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